Thursday, November 18, 2010
The Actual Speech in a rough form
“STOP!!!! You must not do this!” She holds up a child for all to see the depth of the situation. Her brother comes through the crowd and in hushed tones says “_____, a battlefield is no place for you. Father and I will take care of this and you will finally come home.” “This child is mine, brother”. Father said, “Bring the child with you but these barbarians will receive what’s just for kidnapping you.” Projecting her voice, now speaking to all who could hear, “Open your ears, minds, and if your pride allows it, your hearts. One year ago we, the daughters of Sabine, were taken against our will. We hated these men for what they did to us in their chambers. Most of us became pregnant. As we struggled with these pregnancies, these ‘barbarians’ as you call them were the most gentle, considerate men I’ve beheld. We have grown to love them” and with more gentler tones, “as we love our fathers and brothers.” But then regaining her fervor and anger said, “And now we see you here in battle” spitting out the words “and we’re appalled. How could the people we love the most want to kill each other? Don’t you see what will happen? Our families hope to free us that we may be happy but you will only destroy our happiness but murdering our husbands! Our husbands hope to keep us with them by destroying the competition but that will only bring anger and depression as we lose our fathers and brothers! You both are on our side but there is a veil of unawareness clouding your judgment. Take it off now! It is the only way to make your girls happy.” Someone in the crowd calls, “then what do you expect us to do? Walk away?!” “Yes. Walk away until you are ready to meet your new family. The daughters of Sabine are now the wives of Rome. Deal with it.”
Tuesday, November 9, 2010
Character Descriptions
Daughter of Sabine Physical Characteristics: early 20’s Exotic brown eyes. Substantial triangular nose that almost looks out of place, but fits her personality perfectly. Seems intense but her laughter fills the entire room. Long coarse blond hair.
Motherly Figure Physical Characteristics: 50’s. Dark Gray curly shoulder length hair. Dressed in black, providing a mysterious aspect to the character. Deep understanding eyes. Speaks deliberately. She’s given a lot of thought to her proposal and knows exactly who to go to for the action to take place. She watches and observes people and comes into scenes when she’s needed and then disappears.
Husband Physical Characteristics: at least 10 years older than the Daughter of Sabine. Brown short hair. The beginnings of a full beard. A strong, solid frame. He admits his first thoughts of the Daughter of Sabine were lustful but they quickly turned to love as he heard her witty humor. He’s not one to show affection, as he believes it shows weakness and he wants to make sure his appearance is of a strong warrior. However, he feels most comfortable sitting with his wife and newborn just talking by the fire.
Father Characteristics: About the same size as the husband but with a little bit of a smaller head. has pristine facial features, symmetrical. like a retired model. But don’t mistake him for being empty headed. He has a very clear view of what is black and white. While he is willing to change his views if a convincing argument is presented, he can be a bit stubborn. If he believes in something, he really believes it. He really believes that his daughters rightful place is with his own family, cooking with her mother and playing games on the floor with her younger brother. He is determined to bring her home where he believes she will be the happiest.
Motherly Figure Physical Characteristics: 50’s. Dark Gray curly shoulder length hair. Dressed in black, providing a mysterious aspect to the character. Deep understanding eyes. Speaks deliberately. She’s given a lot of thought to her proposal and knows exactly who to go to for the action to take place. She watches and observes people and comes into scenes when she’s needed and then disappears.
Husband Physical Characteristics: at least 10 years older than the Daughter of Sabine. Brown short hair. The beginnings of a full beard. A strong, solid frame. He admits his first thoughts of the Daughter of Sabine were lustful but they quickly turned to love as he heard her witty humor. He’s not one to show affection, as he believes it shows weakness and he wants to make sure his appearance is of a strong warrior. However, he feels most comfortable sitting with his wife and newborn just talking by the fire.
Father Characteristics: About the same size as the husband but with a little bit of a smaller head. has pristine facial features, symmetrical. like a retired model. But don’t mistake him for being empty headed. He has a very clear view of what is black and white. While he is willing to change his views if a convincing argument is presented, he can be a bit stubborn. If he believes in something, he really believes it. He really believes that his daughters rightful place is with his own family, cooking with her mother and playing games on the floor with her younger brother. He is determined to bring her home where he believes she will be the happiest.
Friday, October 22, 2010
First Thoughts
Creativity has different stages. Here's the very first stage of my project. My project is to create the dialog of the daughters of Sabine that stopped a war. My first thoughts re in a very crude form. I did not think about grammar or the best way to say things. I simply wanted to get my ideas on paper and see what you think. Let me know!
Characters:
Daughter of Sabine
Father
Brother
Husband
Motherly figure to the daughter that comes out of no where to give advice. THIS IS WHERE THE IDEA COMES FROM
Lol this is kinda like beauty and the beast…
Do I want to do the whole story or maybe it should just start when she hears the men are preparing for war with her family. Yes. I think it’ll start with her internal thoughts about how she has adjusted and has grown to love her husband. Perhaps having a child was a huge influence. But either way, it has happened and she can’t live without him. Nor her family. Maybe she’s so caught up in her sorrow at a potential loss and heartache that she’s frantic. She cries in a barn. A Motherly figure to the daughter that comes out of no where to give advice. This is where the idea comes from. And then she starts knocking on doors and tells them to knock on doors too, creating a snowball effect. And then the picture. You have the two armies in their forms about to go into battle, anticipating death and blood. But then the daughters come running out with no form at all in between the two armies. Children in their arms and at their heels. In a loose and scattered v form. It surprises both sides. Some people run to confront their wives/daughters. Yelling ensues. Then this daughter that started this whole thing gives a big speech. Needs to involve:
Ethos: Ethos is appeal based on the character of the speaker. An ethos-driven document relies on the reputation of the author. (http://www.rpi.edu/dept/llc/webclass/web/project1/group4/index.html)
Pathos: (Wikipedia) Emotional appeal can be accomplished in a multitude of ways:
by a metaphor or story telling, common as a hook,
by a general passion in the delivery and an overall emotion and sympathies of the speech or writing as determined by the audience. The pathos of a speech or writing is only ultimately determined by the hearers.
Logos: the speech itself, in so far as it proves or seems to prove. (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Logos#Aristotle.27s_rhetorical_logos)
That's what I have so far. What do you think? What did you like? Are there any gaps in the story? How do you think I could bring in the aspect of Pathos?
Characters:
Daughter of Sabine
Father
Brother
Husband
Motherly figure to the daughter that comes out of no where to give advice. THIS IS WHERE THE IDEA COMES FROM
Lol this is kinda like beauty and the beast…
Do I want to do the whole story or maybe it should just start when she hears the men are preparing for war with her family. Yes. I think it’ll start with her internal thoughts about how she has adjusted and has grown to love her husband. Perhaps having a child was a huge influence. But either way, it has happened and she can’t live without him. Nor her family. Maybe she’s so caught up in her sorrow at a potential loss and heartache that she’s frantic. She cries in a barn. A Motherly figure to the daughter that comes out of no where to give advice. This is where the idea comes from. And then she starts knocking on doors and tells them to knock on doors too, creating a snowball effect. And then the picture. You have the two armies in their forms about to go into battle, anticipating death and blood. But then the daughters come running out with no form at all in between the two armies. Children in their arms and at their heels. In a loose and scattered v form. It surprises both sides. Some people run to confront their wives/daughters. Yelling ensues. Then this daughter that started this whole thing gives a big speech. Needs to involve:
Ethos: Ethos is appeal based on the character of the speaker. An ethos-driven document relies on the reputation of the author. (http://www.rpi.edu/dept/llc/webclass/web/project1/group4/index.html)
Pathos: (Wikipedia) Emotional appeal can be accomplished in a multitude of ways:
by a metaphor or story telling, common as a hook,
by a general passion in the delivery and an overall emotion and sympathies of the speech or writing as determined by the audience. The pathos of a speech or writing is only ultimately determined by the hearers.
Logos: the speech itself, in so far as it proves or seems to prove. (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Logos#Aristotle.27s_rhetorical_logos)
That's what I have so far. What do you think? What did you like? Are there any gaps in the story? How do you think I could bring in the aspect of Pathos?
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